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Hi There!

I apologize for the delay and I thank you for your patience for this review.

Now in general the clan is good, there's some solid foundation to work with, but there will need to be some expansion as well clarification.

Clan Ideology

Solid and simply, not all ideologies need to be super complicated but I feel that just making them consider themselves tools might lead to a growing resentment as time passes. Usually such convictions of a clan as guised in noble intentions like "duty and loyalty are their own reward" thus making it easier for the younger generations to accept the idea that their ultimately loyalty if to the village. Take this more as a suggestion. 

Clan Hierarchy

Aside this method of choosing clan leaders, are there not other positions, no elders, no mentors? Having a clan that is lead by the strongest is fine, but perhaps a little bit more of context would enrich its lore. 


Clan Abilities

As it stands the ability to create an oppressive aura from the seemingly demonic chakra can't be used as it is written as you really can't force people to be intimidated. You can certainly keep the 'shroud' and the large chakra reserves for the clan, perhaps you could make a flare that is being showed when in active use or the clan has a faint consistent effect of a genjutsu that creates this aura. 

Please address this and I will be more than happy to give another review. 

I will review this.